My dream is going
travel alone someday. Without friends and family, I want to learn how to plan
my journey well by myself and I can enjoy the time on my own. First, I need to
figure out a wonderful place where I want to go. I want to go Hualien, because
there is very fit place to me, who want to relax and unwind, without anyone’s
disturbance. Hualien, where is the pace of life is extremely slower than big
city, like Taipei city. I always feel stressful when I lived in Taipei city,
because Taipei city is the capital of Taiwan so that there is the most
competitive city in Taiwan, everyone want to be number 1 in there. It makes me
feel pressured so I want to get away from Taipei to Hualien. After knowing
where I want to go, I need to plan my journey well in advance. I need a car to bring
me to everywhere. Next, I reserve hotel accommodation because I don’t want to
spend the night in the car, than preparing cloths and everything I need in the
trip but hotel doesn’t have. Next I will check out the weather forecast, if it
rains, maybe I will cancel the whole plan or postpone the trip some other days.
When I was little, my parents always made the plan and showed me around, now I
want to plan my trip by myself and I hope that someday I can show my parents
around.

Some of the ideas are a little bit irrelevant to the central idea you want to convey. Paragraph like this need to be written more systematic.
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